Thursday, October 12, 2006

Ex-inspections


Upon our meeting you mistook me for the sun

I hated to disappoint your expectations by sinking in the sea

I am jealous of the rain

It has less pressure to perform in the Spring

3 comments:

Skanky Jane said...

I really like you Haiku's - this one especially. You come up with some great linees (without making them sound contrived or "cool"). In fact it's the warmth and 'freedom' in your work, the 'honest ring', that keeps me reading.

The last line in this Haiku is curious...

SJ xxx
Love the colours and imagery you choose.

Shala said...

Thank you.

While this is not a haiku it is a deeply personal confessional of a love that will surely never die because my heart will not allow it. However,I felt the pedestal where I was placed was much too high. Upon writing this, I wished I had never questioned it.

Skanky Jane said...

Oh yes...I presumed the Haiku because of the look of the text on the page - but it doesn't have the count does it?

*listens to your explanation*

*soft smile*

SJ xx